Wednesday, September 26, 2012

The Bauble

4 comments:

  1. Love it! This reminds me of classic pulp SF stories I used to devour as a teenager. They were '50s anthologies of '30s material, bound in battered library bindings. I can smell them right now. They were like psychedelic drugs to me.

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  2. Compelling! I adored reading this. I hope you'll keep sharing more of your pulp scifi with us; I'm eating it up with a really big spoon!

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  3. @Richard & Anna- Thanks so much for giving the story a once over and voicing an opinion. I have wanted to use this idea for a while now, and decided to just go ahead and make it a short story. It is hard to condense things into shorts after you have written two (and a half) novels, you know? I can't help but put things in a larger scale, so I am trying to find a happy medium in this. Writing these couple of new shorts has definitely helped, and I do plan on sharing them as they come along.

    So, sincerely, thank you! I appreciate any and all feedback, be it good or bad...just tell me!

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  4. Good plot line and pacing. The flow warmed up after the first few paragraphs, became less wordy and therefore more smooth and less self-conscious.

    This story was very much in the style of the old pulp Sci-Fi, so you're on the right track!

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